Reviewing over my body paragraph I realized there were a few changes that needed to be made. First I read through for any grammatical errors and fixed those, but the primary thing I change was adding different synonyms for words I though I was overusing. All of my Concrete details and Commentary remained the same ideas. What I am having the most difficulty with is 1. creating different ways to say "the imaginary person one character created of the other" 2. While introducing each quote, expressing who is saying the quote in another way than saying "Jack said to Algernon" or "Gwendolen said to Jack" for examples and 3. other synonyms for couple and relationship: I have come up with pair and duo so far. The last thing I am having difficulty starting is the transition sentence from Leah's paragraph to mine. Any main theme I should keep in mind, or anything major I should definitely include when writing this sentence? Thanks in advance for your help!
Some other ways of saying "the imaginary person one character created of the other" could be something like: "Jack's vision of Gwendolen" or "Gwendolen's made up version of Jack". I'm sure you can can think of better ways to restate that statement, just give it some thought. If you can't think of anything, just rearrange some words and change the wording a bit.There are quite a few good ways to embed quotes into sentences, for example you could say, "When it is discovered that..." or "Gwendolen expresses to Jack that...". You don't always have to include who said what or who it was said to. For Synonyms for couple, you could always use connection, affiliation, link, and others. If you have MS Word, it has a synonym tool. If not, there are plenty online. Hope this helps!
ReplyDeleteOkay so what Zach said was good, and so use his advice. Since he covered the synonym part of it I will help you for the transition. As a transtition between our paragraphs you could mention something about how Cecily and Algernon are one way and Jack and Gwendolen are another. Just use some sort of comparison between the two so that the reader gets that there is a similar theme, but the ideas are a little different. Just find a way for them to be connected but not the same..if that makes sense.. hope this helps you!
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